The gentle breeze caressed the canopy
of the coconut trees. The splashing of the waves formed a delightful
symphony. The cosy stretch of sand was lined with beautiful, glittering
seashells. Children's laughter filled the air. The ambience was so
calm and relaxing.
Kelvin and his family had just arrived
at the beach. Under the natural awning of a rain tree, they were
amply well-shaded, with slivers of sunlight that were dancing on the
well-woven mat. As his parents lounged leisurely on the mat, Kelvin
was blithely frolicking in the shallow waters while Odelia was
swimming nearby.
Out of the blue, desperate cries
pierced through the air. A chill ran down Kelvin's spine. He could
recognise the voice behind the ear-busting scream. It was his
sister! Kelvin immediately whipped his head around and spotted his
sister's hand flailing wildly as her head bobbed up and down the
water.
What should Kelvin do? He could not
swim! A brainwave hit him like a lightning bolt! Alert his dad! He
sprinted as fast as his legs could carry him towards his family's
resting spot. Alas! His parents were missing! They must have gone
for a stroll somewhere. Kelvin's head raced fast like a Ferrari
sports car. He spotted a lifeguard approaching him. He immediately
dashed towards him and pleaded, “Please save my sister! She is
drowning!”
The lifeguard followed close at his
heels. When they reached the scene, Odelia was already missing.
Right before Kelvin's beady eyes was just a vast ocean with some ocean
liners in the background. Kelvin's heart dropped like a stone! Was
his sister dead? He started crying and tears flowed down like two
gushing taps.
Just then, a miracle happened!
Odelia's hands appeared above the crest of the waves. Upon seeing
that, the lifeguard plunged into the azure blue water and swam
towards him in record time. With a forceful tug, he hooked his
muscular arms securely over her neck. Then, using capable and
affirmative strokes, he swam with her towards the shore.
As Odelia lay on the sandy shore, she
was as white as a sheet. She seemed so lifeless. Was she dead? The
lifeguard immediately resuscitated her. After what had seemed like
eternity, she gave a loud cough. Odelia was alive! Kelvin cheered
loudly, hugging his sister tightly.
The parents came over and Kelvin
recounted the incident to them. The family was so grateful to the
lifeguard. They thanked him profusely and the lifeguard praised
Kelvin for his vigilance instead. Kelvin beamed with pride. He
vowed to learn swimming and even planned to take up a lifeguard
course in future. Who knows? Maybe, just maybe, he could be a hero and save some
lives as well.
EXCELLENT!!! :D <3
ReplyDeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteSo nice!
ReplyDeleteIt is a very good type of compo. i like it. m
ReplyDeletegood job yea !!
ReplyDeleteREALLY WELL WRITTEN!!:)) ^~^
ReplyDeletenice! can i copy some useful phrases?
ReplyDeleteOf course, you may! ; )
DeleteWhat a nice story~
ReplyDeleteI CAN WRITE BETTER THAN THIS BUT I CAN ONLY SCORE 38
ReplyDeleteGetting 38 is fantastic! If you want to share, send your composition to me and I will post it for you. Cheers!
DeleteWhy are u so sure that you can write better than her? I doubt that
DeleteVery good choice of phrases used. :)
ReplyDeleteCool!
ReplyDeleteI scored 37!
ReplyDeleteIt's a good compo. I will give at most 34/40! After what seemed like an eternity should be the correct form.
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